09 February 2012

My 100 Word Response

by Diane Carlisle

I've enjoyed responding to the fun challenges from Florida Writer's Conference Blog! Here's their latest challenge and my response.

To all the guys (and some of the women) reading this, let’s pretend this picture isn’t about the first thing you thought when you saw it. After all, not everything revolves around that.


Pretending then, that the woman in this picture isn’t in the throes of connubial bliss, in 100 words or fewer, what’s happening in this picture. One thing that might make it more interesting is what could be a foot and a pantleg in the background. So what’s happening here?

Figure it out. One hundred words or less in 20 minutes.

My response:

The holy water strikes her and slits an open wound across her thighs.

“He commands you exit.” The priest hovers the crucifix above her belly.

“It burns!” she screams, but her voice is muffled with a low growl, then laughter.

“He commands you exit the body, He commands it!”

The holy water boils and spills over the top of the bottle and onto the woman’s stomach.

Father Crest is thrust into the desk and his crucifix plunges deep into his right eye.

He falls to the floor, dead.

The woman is fully consumed. The demon gets up and walks away.

20 comments:

  1. Hehe. I enjoyed that movie. Neat one hundred word scene. Glad you didn't take it down the other suggested route.

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    1. There were many movies about exorcisms, but the original with Linda Blair scared the bejeezes out of me!

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  2. That's perfect!!! I wouldn't have thought of that type of scene. I thought someone having a nightmare or something. Very clever!

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    1. Thank you, Nicole. I like the way Blogger included threaded comments. Very awesome! Glad you liked it.

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    2. With blog hops on Wednesdays and writing challenges too, this is a busy day for me. hehe

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  3. Definitely a more interesting take on the usual. Pointing out the foot and pantleg, I thought perhaps she got injured practicing yoga :-)

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    1. Or the demon snapped her in two. EEK! I know, freaky.

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  4. Yikes, you are very creative and spooky girlfriend!:)

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    1. Thanks chica!

      You should stop over on Wednesdays and try out their challenges. Always a lot of fun. I know how creative you can be.

      Signed,
      Pink Bunny Slippers

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  5. oooooohhh! Great response. Love the demon winning in the end, not expected.

    My first (okay, second) thought was that she was dead.

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    1. You mean dead dead, like her mouth is open because now rigor mortis has set in? Ew! But, I see your point. I can't look at the picture the same way now. lol

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  6. Cool idea! Can I try, even though it's not Wednesday?

    Last week Linda had me lay down on the floor. She positioned my head, then went back to the piano.
    "Okay," she said. "Now try it again from 'Je reve aux amours...'"
    I sang it. She stopped me. Again.
    "No, no, no. Can you feel how you tense your neck and shoulders when you go for that note? Try to leave your head where I put it, and just relax! Once more."
    I sang it. She stopped me. Again.
    "Hm. Maybe we should try something else."

    Hehehehe. I'm such a nerd. :D

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    1. Yes, you can post all week long. They start a new one each Wednesday. Go for it!

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    2. I can see the expressions now, "Me me me me me me me!" and then followed by "La la la la la la la!" :)

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  7. First, I love the term "throes of connubial bliss." Second - great job! Your writing is so clear, and I never would have thought of an exorcism. You always wow me with your creativity!

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    1. Thank you, Lara! I wish I could take credit for "throes of connubial bliss" because it is just that awesome! :)

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  8. Hi! I'm here visiting via the Critique-my-blog blogfest (it's taking a while to work my way through all the blogs.) I appreciate the writing prompt posts you have. You seem to have a pretty fearless voice. Your posts cover a widerange of topics, which, for me, makes a little hard to identify the focus of your blog. And there is something about the font or the color scheme that's a little hard on my eyes, at least on my computer. Your title is intriguing - it's got personality and a sense of fun which drew me to your blog when looking at the list to decide which one to visit tonight.

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    1. Welcome, Cynthia! Thank you for taking the time to view my blog and several of my entries. I very much appreciate your feedback. The colors (white on black background) are a design no-no, but I couldn't give it up.

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  9. Cheers! Great idea! Great pic, and accompanying prompt, too. Wish I had more time to weigh in. Happy Monday : )

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    1. Thank you! Maybe you can get in on the next one. :)

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